Participation in Education

I have looked at one of the writefix.com bar chart example, to support me in writing this (essay report. Therefore, I took my time to make a good chart description. It is good to know that we can combine some columns to generalize our explanation and save time.

Participation in Education

There are 3 graphs that illustrate different areas of contribution in educational field in developing and industrialized countries in 1980 and 1990. I will describe each chart separately.

The average years of schooling in the industrialized countries (between the two times) over the ten year period were about 9 years, compared to 3 in the developing countries. There was a slight increase in the years of schooling in both industrialiized and developing countries from 1980 to 1990.

The number of scientists and technicians out of 10 00 people were 10 in developing countries in 1980, whereas for the industrialized counties, the figures were 4 times more. The data has rose (G) rose considerably by approximately 50 per sent (S) for both sets of countries in this decade. (within 10 years).

In 1980, the industrialized counties have spent (G) WHY???? nearly $150 billion on research and development. By 1990, this number has been soar (G) AGAIN WHY???to about $350. However, half of the amount decreased in the developing countries by the same period meaningless - give us the FACTS please).

We just need a concluding 'overall' sentence here, Ahmed!

(149 words)

Blue text: phrase not sure about.

Red text: words spelled wrong.

I think bar charts are usually more difficult than line graphs. Anyways, I will try to add another bar graph.

Cheers,

Ahmed Mohamed

Ahmed is working on this 'problem'. He recommends www.writefix.com to solve his academic report writing difficulties.

I see progress and improvement. This is a fine example for the others. Thank you Ahmed.

See my comments in normal italic ariel font above. Some serious grammar errors are left uncorrected.

Have a productive time till we meet on Tuesday!

Tony

Yes, I know it's hard, but . . .